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yeah, basicly what Deathcalypse said. the first thing i'd do though is to turn down the vox(alot) in the mix, since they completely drown the instruments.
i like your style, as i've said, or at least i like where it's going - keep at it! there's still an issue with power and such. that also goes for the clean ones. thay have some major flaws. cleans are difficult and require alot of practice. but the power is just as important there as well - make sure to sing out! it won't turn out good until you give it all you got. don't be afraid to fail, just keep trying. i did like the lyrics though, good work on those.
a decent effort in the end, but still alot to improve. i'd say take a step away from the mic and give it your all. keep practicing and you'll get there.